tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1271679208154423155.post1323485533238914216..comments2014-07-03T04:11:59.631+12:00Comments on Hosannah: Who is the 'Banana Thief?' - Narrative WritingPES Blog Gmailhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10430434432980030044noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1271679208154423155.post-52343893597622161312013-11-05T09:14:08.703+13:002013-11-05T09:14:08.703+13:00Hey Hosannah,
What cheek monkeys you met in your ...Hey Hosannah,<br /><br />What cheek monkeys you met in your story. I hope you at least got to enjoy the rest of your picnic. You've used some great alliteration but be careful to make sure it flows, there can be too much of a good thing sometimes :p<br /><br />Maybe next time you could write about why you didn't like the monkeys to begin with? <br /><br />Keep writing :) Mr. Hutchings.Mr. Hutchingsnoreply@blogger.com